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20 November 2006 @ 08:41 am
Supernatural Gen Drabbles: Desperate Deals  
Title: Desperate Deals
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: John, Sam, Dean (Gen)
Rating; PG
Summary: 2x100 drabbles on “bargaining” for supernatural100.

x-x-x-x-x

Undoing
If I hadn’t stopped going to church, John thinks. Maybe then they’d have been passed over and left to their happiness instead of grief.

If I’m good, maybe God will bring her back, Dean thinks. He doesn’t know there’s no undoing, that the dead cannot return and be themselves once life has gone.

If I leave, it will not follow, Sam thinks. But they’re not the cause—the evil exists, and they’re just able to see the signs.

Sam, don’t shoot--Dad might still have a chance! Dean thinks. He doesn’t know the luck they find can never, ever last.


Sacrifice
Summonings are what John fixes. He doesn’t call the darkness forth—he sends it back after others set it free.

In the basement of the hospital, he draws the pentagram, mark and sigil. The creature comes through the door and not the floor, but still it comes.

It’s hard to give up the Colt, John finds. He knows he has to, but it’s their future—it’s the only way to win against the Demon that destroyed them all.

It’s not enough; he saw that coming.

Giving himself up is so much easier. That’s the part the boys must never know.


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elanurel: Brokenelanurel on November 20th, 2006 04:55 pm (UTC)
Ouch. I thought you had broken my heart with "If I'm good..." but this just slayed me:

Giving himself up is so much easier. That’s the part the boys must never know.

Lovely, as always. You pack so much into these that it's really like reading poems and not prose.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 03:57 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! Oh, I'm so tardy getting back to these comments (yipes! A month late!), but I'm so glad you liked them.

These seemed like the two most important "bargaining" instances in the family's past, and it's impossible to ignore either one of them.
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 03:59 am (UTC)
Poor John-- having to give away so much at the end, all his dreams of vengeance and the possibility of the Colt carrying it out.

But compared to saving Dean... nothing at all. And it's true what they say: Dying is easy. Living is hard. :(
Entendre? Make mine a double.: SN brothers looking animateddeirdre_c on November 20th, 2006 05:54 pm (UTC)
Ow ow ow!

Lovely, hon. ♥
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 04:00 am (UTC)
Sorry! They do that to me all on their own. Their circumstances alone were born in pain, and what didn't come from that they made themselves.
Riri: broken2bassgrrl on November 20th, 2006 05:59 pm (UTC)
Those boys are so broken...
Wonderful job!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 05:13 am (UTC)
Thank you so much, bassgrr! Their agony is inspiring, I must say...
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on November 20th, 2006 06:36 pm (UTC)
Owie. Lotsa owie.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 06:26 am (UTC)
I know! I'm sorry-- they do it to themselves! ♥
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 06:27 am (UTC)
The pain these two lines bring forth is pretty unbearable, my heart is heavy.
Oh, that means a lot to me. Their pain is so palpable, and to do it justice is a never-ending task.

Thank you, Debbie. :)
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 06:28 am (UTC)
I'm so thrilled people noticed that last line-- all the regrets and implications there say so much about John, from beginning to end. Thank you, Rinne. :)
plutogirl10 on November 20th, 2006 11:42 pm (UTC)
The first one is just desolate. They're all running from their own fears. *sigh* Poor boys.

They're both beautifully done, hon : )
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 06:29 am (UTC)
Thank you! And I'm sorry I was so dreadful about getting around to all these wonderful comments. It's wonderful to see that these brief moments are really coming through. :)
I'm for wine and the embrace of questionable women: papamissyjack on November 21st, 2006 01:47 am (UTC)
Giving himself up is so much easier. That’s the part the boys must never know. Oh John!

The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 06:29 am (UTC)
Oh, it hurts because it's true! He put them through so much, and yet he hid a lot of what it cost him too. :(
iamstealthyoneiamstealthyone on November 21st, 2006 04:29 am (UTC)
I think I’m echoing some other people’s FB, but these lines were my favorites

If I’m good, maybe God will bring her back, Dean thinks. He doesn’t know there’s no undoing, that the dead cannot return and be themselves once life has gone.

Oh, Dean.

Giving himself up is so much easier. That’s the part the boys must never know.

Oh, John.

Poor, broken Winchesters. *hugs them*
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 06:32 am (UTC)
Dean's part in the first drabble hurts me the most, because it's such a simple, childlike way of thinking that can't imagine the permanence of someone dying. How sad when he finally realizes that it can't be fixed. :(

And the final part of the John drabble-- there was so much weariness to the man at the end of his part of the story. That final piece he gave up must have seemed so much smaller than he could ever have imagined...
     Mandy: Scary Just Got Sexy - John by kali_samaa_phoenixdragon on November 22nd, 2006 01:00 pm (UTC)
Oh, nononononononooooooo...

*Weeps*

John!! JOHN....

*Sob*

*Clings*

*Loves you*
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on December 20th, 2006 06:34 am (UTC)
I'm still torn about John's ending. He went too quietly, but it was still the right choice and maybe that should be enough?

But it's too unsung. I can't seem to leave it alone, in all its various forms.
     Mandy: Papa Winchester by teklaa_phoenixdragon on December 20th, 2006 07:06 am (UTC)
I understand that, lol! Whenever somehing like that bothers me, I just can't let it go! But that's okay - it makes for some awesome stories! Keep sending, and I'll keep reading.

*Hugs you*