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20 October 2006 @ 11:46 am
Supernatural Gen Drabbles: The Unknowable (6th Sense)  
Title: The Unknowable
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Dean and Sam (Gen)
Rating: PG
Summary: 3x100 drabbles on “Sixth Sense” for supernatural100.
Author's Notes: I wrote the first of these a week ago-- damn canon for actually speaking my scene last night! Though I loved it. :)


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Cheated (In My Time of Dying)
It’s not chance—Dean’s absolutely sure.

One minute his father was walking on his own, and the next he was on the hospital floor. His life fled his body with no reason, no witness.

This is not how John Winchester dies. This can’t be the end Fate had in store for him—so quick, so quiet, so… muted.

John should have gone out in a blaze of glory, sword buried in the enemy that finally beat him.

Dean feels angry and cheated, and he’s damn sure something else is going on.

This invisible death can’t be John’s. It’s a lie.



Summoned (Sam, Scarecrow)
Not their first or last argument, but it wasn’t ever like this when they were young.

It was “Gimme” and “I’m telling Dad,” and little spats that are over and soon forgotten.

It wasn’t these lines drawn in the sand, of “You’re just like him” and “All you care about is yourself.”

Sam left again, despite the pain underneath Dean’s bluster.

But he heard it on the phone, and it forced him back and straight to Dean’s unknowable predicament.

Death would have found Dean within the hour in that god-forsaken orchard.

Sam was almost too late. Thank god he listened.



Presence (In My Time Of Dying)
It’s not just denial, this feeling that Dean’s in the room with him now.

Not the Dean in the bed—the one who’s wandering the invisible ether.

The feeling comes and goes— even passes right through him —and Sam has to grab it with all he’s got before it escapes and Dean goes with it.

The Ouija board is desperation. Sam knows Dean would mock him for it endlessly at any other time.

The planchet moves under a pressure that isn’t his own.

And Dean is there, just as Sam inexplicably knew. This silent game keeps alive that almost-broken thread.



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bluesister on October 20th, 2006 07:03 pm (UTC)
It wasn’t these lines drawn in the sand, of “You’re just like him” and “All you care about is yourself.”

You do know those boys. These are all good shots of sixth sensing. I especially love the end of the middle one.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2006 07:14 pm (UTC)
You do know those boys.
:D When they bring their issues out, they use the sharp knives, that's for sure. Ouch!

I had some perhaps 3 other POVs planned, but just couldn't find the inspiration and I'm having such trouble completing anything these days.

So out the door with this one. Must write a first "Fall" one, because #2 is done. And "Speed"... haven't found a hook for that one yet. :(
 Late Night Drops of Random: Dean angstmoondropz on October 20th, 2006 07:25 pm (UTC)
Nicely done! I am new to the show(have caught up at a rapid rate-lol), but I can see you are firmly entrenched into their psyche. Very spot on!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2006 08:36 pm (UTC)
I am new to the show(have caught up at a rapid rate-lol),
:D I can see from your icon (and the catching-up speed) that you've already found it worthy. Two OTHER interdependent brothers, with issues and hit-or-miss bonding, and then there's the dark and spooky and the snark-snark-snark.

Not that there's any snark in these per-se, but how I do love it.

Glad you're enjoying the show AND these drabbles. :) I'm behind in my drabbling-- these ones are weeks overdue. :0
(no subject) - moondropz on October 20th, 2006 08:57 pm (UTC) (Expand)
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on October 20th, 2006 07:49 pm (UTC)
*flappy hands*

The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2006 08:38 pm (UTC)
:D Thank you!

I'm overdue on writing new SPN (nothing since last week's Bee Suit extravaganza for Halloween). That angsty non-con thing is _killllling_ me. I'm dragging it out one word at a time.

So nice to get these out. *happy sigh* Have one for "Fall" too, but there's another that goes with it to be written.

Why have you not joined supernatural100? You definitely know how to drabble, and it would be fun to see what you come up with. :)
(no subject) - acostilow on October 20th, 2006 09:06 pm (UTC) (Expand)
the only blowup doll bobblehead on the internetimpertinence on October 20th, 2006 08:04 pm (UTC)
Your fics are incredible--I honestly feel like they could be canon. ♥ Beautiful.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2006 08:40 pm (UTC)
Meep! Thank you so much, impertinence!

Writing to be like canon (other than the Wincest-- how Wincest would be IF it were canon) is something I strive for in my fics, so that is such a wonderful compliment. :)

Entendre? Make mine a double.: SN brothers beauty both by marishnadeirdre_c on October 20th, 2006 09:23 pm (UTC)
John should have gone out in a blaze of glory, sword buried in the enemy that finally beat him.

Man, I still hold out hope that we can get this somehow. A la Mary giving herself to protect them in Home.

Lovely work, m'dear!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2006 10:20 pm (UTC)
Man, I still hold out hope that we can get this somehow. A la Mary giving herself to protect them in Home.
Me too-- as a viewer, it frustrates me that this was John's end. The gesture was huge, but the reality was so quiet. :(

Makes me think of Demon Anya's end in "Buffy"-- a lesser sacrifice, but it's a whimper instead of a bang. It's practically dismissed.

So glad you enjoyed these-- and I would like to see John in SOME form come back again. :)
Pheebs1: Black Coat Dean Promopheebs1 on October 20th, 2006 09:56 pm (UTC)
This silent game keeps alive that almost-broken thread.
Just...loved that line.

You are good at this drabbles malarkey ;)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2006 10:53 pm (UTC)
This silent game keeps alive that almost-broken thread.
Just...loved that line.

That thread becomes more tenuous with every passing minute, whether Sam knows it or not. John's pact rescued Dean in the nick of time.

Glad you enjoyed these! Finally getting some drabble mojo back now. More to come. :D
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2006 10:56 pm (UTC)
Again with the elegant heartbreaking.
Ooh! Sounds like a trademark phrase: Elegant Heartbreaktm. :)

such a painful punch in so few words...
It's been weeks since I wrote any drabbles, but I always hope to keep them stark and tight, where possible.

Thank you, Claire. :D
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 21st, 2006 02:33 am (UTC)
Thank you, alias_chick. And goosebumps is a reaction I like very much!

Haven't forgotten your question in the other fic's comments. Will try not to be lazy for too long. :D
mooyoo: SN - John So tiredmooyoo on October 21st, 2006 01:41 am (UTC)
Very nice, especially the first one because - yes. That shouldn't be how John Winchester goes out. As dierdre_c said, I'm still holding out hope that there is more in store for him. And I can see Dean in particular being unable to handle that end for John, as he probably had in his head an image of John dying in a blaze of glory many years in the future while in battle with The Demon - or not at all.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on October 21st, 2006 02:43 am (UTC)
That shouldn't be how John Winchester goes out.
Exactly-- the gesture is big, but the moment is not. And I prefer to have him go out fighting, when it comes right down to it.

And I can see Dean in particular being unable to handle that end for John, as he probably had in his head an image of John dying in a blaze of glory many years in the future while in battle with The Demon - or not at all.
Yes-- John should have gotten his battle, and whether he survived or not, the Demon should have been conquered. It's the only end worthy of Dean's image of John. :(
plutogirl10 on October 21st, 2006 05:39 am (UTC)
Beautifully done, all of them : )

This silent game keeps alive that almost-broken thread.

I LOVE that line, it's so delicately spun.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 21st, 2006 07:23 am (UTC)
It's so interesting the lines that catch people's attention-- especially the ones we add at the end that seem to come from nowhere.

I'm thinking of your "poison apple delicious" line from a few days ago-- similar situation.

Oh, if Sam hadn't kept trying... Dean was closer to escaping than Sam will ever know.
Are we back to hos over bros?lissa_bear on October 21st, 2006 07:58 pm (UTC)
I think maybe I've told you this before, but your SPN genfic hits me harder than anything else you write. It's beautiful and perfect.

This can’t be the end Fate had in store for him—so quick, so quiet, so… muted.


And this line? Kills me!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 21st, 2006 10:09 pm (UTC)
but your SPN genfic hits me harder than anything else you write. It's beautiful and perfect.
Oh, that is so sweet! Thank you, Elissa. *beams*

And this line? Kills me!
The concept kills me. THAT is how it ends? For John, of all people? It's so unfair. :(
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Diner Deanhalfshellvenus on October 21st, 2006 10:11 pm (UTC)
This drabble says it all perfectly, says what we knew was rolling around in Dean's heart & brain but would never slip past his lips.
Until this last week's episode, where he said something very much like it. I was blown away by that-- I didn't think he'd say it, though I was sure that he'd suspect it.

Now that his suspicion has come full circle, it all defaults to guilt. His fault, no matter what-- always his fault. :(
iamstealthyoneiamstealthyone on October 21st, 2006 10:59 pm (UTC)
Nicely written, all of them. I especially like the second one, and how it shows the different between them as children, and them as adults:

Not their first or last argument, but it wasn’t ever like this when they were young.

It was “Gimme” and “I’m telling Dad,” and little spats that are over and soon forgotten.

It wasn’t these lines drawn in the sand, of “You’re just like him” and “All you care about is yourself.”


Yeah, with age comes new ways of twisting the knife in the people you love.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on October 22nd, 2006 06:09 am (UTC)
and how it shows the different between them as children, and them as adults:
Oh, the early arguments are so temporary and of-the-moment.

Those later ones are deadly-- they know how to hurt each other better than anyone else could, unfortunately.

Can't believe they got back to the point of driving each other away again so quickly in "Scarecrow." Still hurts when I think about it even now.
(no subject) - iamstealthyone on October 22nd, 2006 02:09 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Ice-T: an actor, also a refreshing beverage: SPN - John Winchester Rock Saltfiddleyoumust on October 21st, 2006 11:53 pm (UTC)
Gah! I love the John drabble. So perfect. It especially rings true after what Dean said to the reaper about there not being an honorable death. He may not think that death is ever honorable, but he damn sure knows his father was meant for a better death than the one he got. I really love that.

The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on October 22nd, 2006 06:11 am (UTC)
but he damn sure knows his father was meant for a better death than the one he got.
After you've seen the end of that episode, that seems like foreshadowing, because John doesn't go out the way he 'should.'

It should have been louder, a battle for all to see. Slipping away a few corners out-of-sight just isn't the ending anyone finds worthy of who he was. :(
getting the chocolate in the peanut butter: carboysmountainsdotfic on October 22nd, 2006 03:21 pm (UTC)
I love all 3 of these.

John should have gone out in a blaze of glory, sword buried in the enemy that finally beat him.

Wonderful line, and so very much how Dean sees his father. Hm. And who's to say at this point John didn't leave his sword buried in his enemy. *has theories*

This invisible death can’t be John’s. It’s a lie.

Oh, nicely done.

Loved the character insights in the second one and terrific Sam POV in the 3rd.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on October 25th, 2006 05:05 am (UTC)
And who's to say at this point John didn't leave his sword buried in his enemy. *has theories*
:) I think all of fandom wants something that feels more like "justice" on that particular point. Dean's not alone.

Thanks so much for your lovely words, Dot. Glad you enjoyed these (sure took awhile to get them out). :)