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15 December 2014 @ 02:12 pm
LJ Idol Season Nine: "Wish You Were Here"  
Wish You Were Here
lj idol season nine | week 31 | 1336 words
“The future outwits all our certitudes”

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Before the age of eight, Danny Ruthers was forbidden to go into the attic. Once he was older, his mother let him come along with her as long as he promised not to touch the things on the shelf at the back. They didn't look very interesting anyway, Danny thought, and they were all out of reach. But when he was nine, his curiosity got the better of him. He moved a box over and climbed on it to get a better look, and discovered that there was more on that shelf than dusty knick-knacks and an old, broken clock. There was a small chest the size of a shoebox hidden at the very back, and it was not the least bit dusty.

The chest was also locked.

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swirlsofblueswirlsofblue on December 18th, 2014 05:05 pm (UTC)
Love the characterisation of Danny, and the portrayal of the whole concept of people going into pictures, beautifully sorrowfully sweet.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 18th, 2014 07:48 pm (UTC)
Thank you! The final outcome helps take the sting out of all those years before, I hope, for both Danny and his mother.
☾witches on December 18th, 2014 05:50 pm (UTC)
this was so amazing <3
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 18th, 2014 07:49 pm (UTC)
Yay-- I'm so glad you liked it!
ArmagedDanhosticle_fifer on December 18th, 2014 07:17 pm (UTC)
Very nice. The opening had that quiet intrigue that I felt myself when exploring mysteries around my childhood home; from there to palpable loss and on to a happy ending that was not saccharine. Well done through and through!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 18th, 2014 07:50 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much!

Even our own past is so often a little bit foreign to us, I think. We were there, but with the perspective of having grown older, even our memories of it change a little bit.
crisp_sobrietycrisp_sobriety on December 18th, 2014 09:43 pm (UTC)
Aw, this is incredibly sweet. Even if they don't get to be in the real-world, I'm glad they all wound up together.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 18th, 2014 11:28 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

It may be "a" real world, it just isn't the one they used to live in. And together is what really matters. :)