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06 May 2014 @ 09:46 pm
LJ Idol Season Nine: "An Adventure Of 'Yes'"  
An Adventure Of "Yes"
lj idol season nine | week eight | 2560 words (total)
Yes, and


Around the corner of the last street out of town is a little brick building you've probably heard of. If you go down the stairs, there will be a sign on the door that says, "The Other Way."

It is the place where people go when they're searching for something like adventure.

It is the beginning of May, and you've filed your taxes and rotated the flannel sheets into storage. Spring has made an appearance, and while you could prune the yard into submission or plant vegetables for the garden, the feverish restlessness of the season makes you want to do something else. Something bigger. But what?

In the past, you've thought about taking up a new hobby. There's rowing (zzzZZZZZzzzz), or barrel-racing (ridiculous!), or amateur theater (not the best choice for someone who suffers from runaway stage fright). There's mountain biking, but both you and your doctor know how that would probably go.

You want fun and excitement, but let's face it, you don’t want to do a lot of practicing or planning to get there. Because how is that fun? If there's work involved, you might as well go back to messing around with the laundry.

You decide to go on an adventure, instead.

It takes ten minutes to drive to the edge of town, through the business district and the old city neighborhoods to the scant stretch of bars and warehouses two stoplights short of the old highway. You turn left on Mystery Drive and park next to the little brick building. Taking a deep breath, you go down the stairs and enter through the door of The Other Way.

"Hello!" A pretty, dark-haired woman greets you from behind a counter. The room looks like an informal lobby, with chairs and a sofa to the right and a large chalkboard to the left. The board has "Today's Specials" written on it, a listing of offerings and prices. A few other people are sitting around waiting, presumably other adventurers or guides.

"You're lucky it's the weekend," the woman says. "The selection is pretty good."

You decided on the drive over that you would say "Yes" to new things today, and see where that led. You have the whole day free, and the answering machine is on at home, so why not? You look at the board and consider your options. Which one will you choose?

1. A four-winery bus trip. ($60)
2. Expertly-guided white-water rafting. ($125)
3. An air-tour of the local region by plane. ($200)

Or maybe these are all too rich for your blood, and you decide to just go home?

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solstice_singer on May 7th, 2014 06:15 am (UTC)
This was really clever! Nicely done.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 7th, 2014 06:24 am (UTC)
Thank you! I hadn't done one of these before, but this was the perfect prompt for it. And whew-- a lot of work!
Teo Sayseternal_ot on May 7th, 2014 07:01 am (UTC)
I enjoyed this take!! Well done!What an adventure with loads of fun!..:)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 7th, 2014 07:27 am (UTC)
This one really took the prompt to its extremes-- saying yes to all kinds of things (and letting the reader do it as well), though you never quite know if "yes" was the right choice until it's too late. :O

So glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!
adoptedwriteradoptedwriter on May 7th, 2014 12:46 pm (UTC)
I'd go rafting....or the wine trip! Not both at the same time! LOL
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 7th, 2014 04:46 pm (UTC)
Not unless wineries were sitting along the river-- and you could get the raft to stop when you wanted it to. :D
bleodsweanbleodswean on May 7th, 2014 01:44 pm (UTC)
THAT, m'dear, was quite a bit of work! A very fun experiment!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 7th, 2014 04:47 pm (UTC)
Oh, it was. I knew that going in, but I'd sketched blurbs for the plotting and it seemed fairly manageable. After writing out the blurbs (with intermittent research), and posting and linking the whole thing, I'd come around to admitting that it was every bit as much work as I'd feared.

But still worth it. :D
tatdatcmtatdatcm on May 7th, 2014 03:08 pm (UTC)
I really enjoyed this. My first instinct was awesome, and it was even better as I went through all the choices.

I love the little tie-in with the home choice.

This was clever and your descriptions were amazing.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 7th, 2014 04:49 pm (UTC)
Hee- I'm glad you read the "home" choice. I wonder how many other people will?

There is a certain "alternate-universe" sense that started to creep in while writing this, so I thought, well why not USE that? :D
rayasorayaso on May 7th, 2014 08:26 pm (UTC)
Absolutely magnificent! This is the most legal fun with a mouse that I've ever had. The technical part aside, the writing was, as usual, great, with many evocative phrases, realistic dialogue, and satisfying turns. Writing and stitching all these adventures together took a lot of time. You turned "yes, and" from an acting Improv game into a written one.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 7th, 2014 08:30 pm (UTC)
Thank you! You probably didn't realize it was going to get this extensive, even as I was rattling away at it the last few days. But the details were a lot of fun-- especially the weirder ones. Lots of research sometimes, too, but fun! :D
cindytsuki_no_bara on May 8th, 2014 01:02 pm (UTC)
this is great! i love that for the second two adventues, saying "yes" to the crazy stuff is the better choice. even giving up and going home is a bad idea. and i head "it looks as if this is the end for you" on the rafting adventure in a very matter-of-fact voice and it made me giggle. also, death by geese! pink snow, yick. fabulous idea, two thumbs up!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 8th, 2014 05:25 pm (UTC)
So glad you enjoyed it! Writing all of the scenarios was fun, and I'm glad some of the results weren't at all what you expected!

Home... not as safe as you might think. ;)
i_17bingoi_17bingo on May 8th, 2014 04:10 pm (UTC)


Actually that part of the story reminded me how a pot dealer I used to know did business--his business cards said something weird, but innocuous, so he could hand them out freely without worry.

Anyway, I'm impressed that you managed to capture how utterly threatening the original Choose Your Own Adventures were to life and limb. Those old books were freaking violent.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 8th, 2014 05:27 pm (UTC)
Hahahaha-- I'm so glad someone noticed "Goatscaping." It's a good concept for field-cleanup and such, but not the kind of thing you want to be cornered into discussing. Plus, the name of the business... that just makes the guy seem weirder. :D

It's fun to take the adventuring idea to extremes-- where even the adventure you've chosen might not seem all that dangerous, but the actual results... may vary. ;)
shimmerdreamshimmerdream on May 8th, 2014 09:53 pm (UTC)
You had me at "Goatscaping."

This was really cool, and I loved the way some of the adventures seemed to tie in with each other.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 8th, 2014 10:41 pm (UTC)
Hahahaha-- the whole "Goatscaping" thing just fell into my lap, and that word alone made the alternate wine-trip adventure worthwhile, at least to me. :D

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and yes-- some of the universes do sort of collide at points. :D
reckless_bluesreckless_blues on May 8th, 2014 11:22 pm (UTC)
My first playthrough I got the ending that said, "But was it enough?" and thought this was going to be a lot darker.

(But now I still feel a little depressed and unfulfilled anyway :{ )

Do you know much about how really old, really fancy wine tastes? Is it really like that? *interested*
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 9th, 2014 12:12 am (UTC)
That ending is to encourage the reader to try the other paths, and see what happens. ;)

The implication with the old wine was that one bottle was probably good, and the other... not ruined, but "off." Once the bottles are really old, there is always a coin-toss as to which way they'll turn out.

Thanks for reading!
(no subject) - reckless_blues on May 9th, 2014 12:31 am (UTC) (Expand)
mistearyusdiva2mistearyusdiva2 on May 9th, 2014 09:04 am (UTC)
Aah the bold and restless soul that gets bored for lack of plausible adventures. I like the take on the prompt that is probably just letting us know that saying yes to everything and anything may just not be the cup of tea that we want to savour :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 9th, 2014 04:39 pm (UTC)
:D Yes-- Saying "Yes" to anything and everything does not always have good results, even when you can't anticipate what the bad might be.

No excuse for being a stick-in-the-mud for the rest of your life, but no guarantee of happiness, either. ;)
lriG rorriM: pathlrig_rorrim on May 9th, 2014 08:57 pm (UTC)
Omigosh, I LOVE this. But you knew I would. ;) The choices are awesome fun, and the descriptions are great. It's quite an adventure!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 10th, 2014 01:00 am (UTC)
I was hoping you would! Given how much you enjoyed making one of these yourself, I expected you would get a kick out of reading this-- and taking all the paths, some far more dangerous than others. :O
(no subject) - lrig_rorrim on May 11th, 2014 03:11 pm (UTC) (Expand)
penpusherpenpusher on May 10th, 2014 01:45 am (UTC)
Wow! your ambition shines through!! I would try something like this but it is so daunting!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 10th, 2014 02:51 am (UTC)
It is a lot of work, though also fun! Really, all the linking of things together took quite awhile-- though the Web makes a nice interface for one of these.

If we hadn't had that extra time, I wouldn't have tried it. Honestly, my first reaction to the prompt was, "Take a bye." This was the second. :D
Your Facekandigurl on May 10th, 2014 02:41 pm (UTC)
I died, of course, that is how I normally conclude adventures chosen myself. :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 10th, 2014 05:51 pm (UTC)
As I seem to recall, that's a very common outcome of some of these, too! Forcing you to back up and try again... :D
Bridget Ilene Delaneykagomeshuko on May 10th, 2014 06:09 pm (UTC)
That had to be quite a bit of work! I loved those Choose Your Own Adventure books when I was little, so I've thought about trying to write those types of stories. It always seemed complicated.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on May 10th, 2014 10:51 pm (UTC)
At least for this, you can't make it too long or people won't have enough time to read it.

But I've done the books, and they're so complicated that I have wound up looping back over a few storylines at times, which is a little weird.

Thanks for reading!
(no subject) - kagomeshuko on May 19th, 2014 02:50 am (UTC) (Expand)