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14 December 2013 @ 06:41 pm
Original Poetry: "The Bold Secrets Of Competent Men  
Title: The Bold Secrets of Competent Men
Fandom: Original Poetry
Author: HalfshellVenus
Summary: Life does not come naturally to everyone.
Author's Notes: A loose interpretation of the writerverse prompt of, " Watch Me Slowly Suicide"


This is me, trying again
until the words are lost
and my tie droops in obvious failure.
I plummet like a plane gone earthbound,
smoke spilling out behind.
Suddenly, I'm on the wrong side of the door.

(Grant me the kindness of pretending
that no one else remembers).

This is me, wanting to help
but never knowing how to comfort
or seeing just how to fix what's wrong.
My arms are awkward, my voice uncertain,
as I stumble over good intentions
and somehow manage to make it all worse.

(I could not teach such an art if I wanted to,
this burden I sometimes fear will never leave).

This is me, finally learning
that simply being there makes a difference
that grand gestures and words can also demand or lie.
The perfect answer might not come,
but a warm shoulder can be a rock
when the world is crumbling.

(All the stars I've wished on have gone dark,
but night has an end. Each day, the light returns).

----- fin -----

Serena64serena64 on December 15th, 2013 02:51 pm (UTC)
Oh, I like that.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 15th, 2013 08:23 pm (UTC)
I wanted to give a clear sense of what it was like to failure-spiral again and again, but not have it actually BE suicide. Much like the context of the song that line is from (if I'm remembering it correctly). It's about doing things that go horribly badly, but you do them anyway because you're compelled to or because there's a glimmer of hope that just maybe...

Life is like that. Sometimes, making it work anything like the way you want just takes a while.

Thanks for reading! I've missed seeing you around. :)
bleodswean: tattbleodswean on December 15th, 2013 11:02 pm (UTC)
I like it!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 16th, 2013 07:37 am (UTC)
Thank you!
cindytsuki_no_bara on December 16th, 2013 03:35 am (UTC)
this starts out kind of depressing but ends on such an up note. so i like it. :D
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 16th, 2013 07:38 am (UTC)
The prompt itself drives that mood, though I wanted to use the idea in such a way that it's clear that even repeated failures don't mean you'll never succeed. Sometimes, the problem is one of recognizing success when it's different from what you expected!