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18 July 2006 @ 05:11 pm
Supernatural Gen Crack-Drabble: Victory With A Side Of Fries  
Title: Victory With A Side Of Fries
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Sam and Dean (Gen, Crackfic)
Rating: PG
Summary: This could be a follow-on to this CrackFic from a few months back. The adventure continues… I’m thinking maybe a series of CrackFic adventures would be good.
Author’s Notes: Written for the supernatural100 “Dialogue Only” challenge. There were bonus points for marking the characters without using their names. Hope I succeeded, based on “voice” alone.

x-x-x-x-x

“God, that was awesome. Another win for the Winchesters.”

“What?”

“Back there. The mind-control dude. We vaporized his ass!”

“You mean the guy that got away? After he choked you to the ground and hypnotized you with his creepy painted-on eyes?”

“Dude, what are you smoking? I pulverized him. Now, let’s eat. I see a Jack-in-the-Box ahead.”

“Aha! He did get you!”

“He didn’t ‘get’ me. I put in a hard afternoon. And now I’m hungry.”

“Whatever. Loser.”

“I heard that!”

“And? You’re the man-bitch of a ping-pong-ball-headed alien…”

“Am not! Ooh—Chicken Ciabatta.”

“I rest my case… loser.”

“Freak.”


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bluesister on July 19th, 2006 01:04 am (UTC)
Gruesome. And, yes, you succeeded!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 19th, 2006 01:50 am (UTC)
:D Normally, I would have used actual names. But I thought I'd press try my luck.
I'm for wine and the embrace of questionable womenmissyjack on July 19th, 2006 01:40 am (UTC)
You’re the man-bitch of a ping-pong-ball-headed alien…”

*sprays caffeinated drink thru nose*

just wonderful. This challenge has really produced some gems.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 19th, 2006 01:51 am (UTC)
So, I'm hoping you figured out who the enemy was? :0 Not to mention his victim....

I am SO behind in my drabble reading, now that the community has actual posts! Tons of them! :D
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on July 19th, 2006 02:52 am (UTC)
Hee. I love the way you write them. :D
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 19th, 2006 03:03 am (UTC)
Thank you, Athena! Any trouble telling which was Sam and which was Dean? Or the identity of the Villain-of-the-Week? ;)
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on July 19th, 2006 03:11 am (UTC)
No, not really. The villian, well...I'm not up on my monsters, sadly...

Wait. Please tell me it wasn't Jack Sparrow. Though that would be awesome.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 19th, 2006 03:13 am (UTC)
Ark! Wrong Jack! No, it's the "Jack-in-the-Box" mascot. Who literally has a giant ping-pong ball for a head. Dean's plan at the end of the prior crackFic was to go after him...
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on July 19th, 2006 03:29 am (UTC)
OMG, I'm thick. *laughs* You rock, darlin. You rock like whoa.
Pixpixel_0 on July 19th, 2006 04:32 am (UTC)
Is it bad that I'm actually happy they killed the Jack-in-the-Box icon? Because with all those new commercials, he's really starting to get on my nerves. So, yes, go Sam and Dean. :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 19th, 2006 09:14 pm (UTC)
Is it bad that I'm actually happy they killed the Jack-in-the-Box icon?
There is something freakishly wrong about him (perhaps the giant, frozen head). But sadly, he is not dead! Sam had it right-- he addled Dean's brain. Stuck.On.Brand.Loyalty.Now.

Glad you liked it, though. I'm thinking about a series of Crack adventures for the boys. I could probably even base them all on television commercials-- there's a lot of fodder there. :0
Pixpixel_0 on July 20th, 2006 02:04 am (UTC)
But sadly, he is not dead! Sam had it right-- he addled Dean's brain. Stuck.On.Brand.Loyalty.Now.

Well, that's disappointing. Poor Dean. Poor Sam for having to deal with addicted Dean!

And yes, you definitely should continue the crack adventures. Sam and Dean take on the restaurant icons of America. Hello Ronald McDonald! ;)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 20th, 2006 03:08 am (UTC)
Hello Ronald McDonald! ;)
Oh, God. There's another one that REALLY creeps me out. He's got sexual predator vibes shrieking from every angle of his red-and-yellow suit! :0
BEWARE OF JENMAR.: SPN - Trust - SamandDeanclex_monkie89 on July 19th, 2006 12:00 pm (UTC)
Wow. That's some nice crack right there.

Randomly? I totally saw someone in a Jack costume one Halloween. It was much funnier than it should have been.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 19th, 2006 09:16 pm (UTC)
Wow. That's some nice crack right there
:D It's a mini-sequel to the story I wrote for you.

I totally saw someone in a Jack costume one Halloween. It was much funnier than it should have been.
Wonder where the eye-holes were? Heck-- I always wonder that. The Jack guy generally looks fairly blank-- perhaps it's the painted-on face on that enormous round white head. :0


I lurve your icon.
BEWARE OF JENMAR.: SPN - Trust - SamandDeanclex_monkie89 on July 20th, 2006 01:35 am (UTC)
:D It's a mini-sequel to the story I wrote for you.

And I love it to pieces!

The Jack guy generally looks fairly blank-- perhaps it's the painted-on face on that enormous round white head. :0

They have new commercials, here at least, with him being attacked by lobsters. They painted little >.< eyes on him and it was way funnier than it should have been.

I lurve your icon.

Thank you, carmendove made it, isn't it perfect?
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 20th, 2006 03:10 am (UTC)
Thank you, carmendove made it, isn't it perfect?
It IS. There's a certain romantic depth to her platonic Winchester love. If that makes sense.
BEWARE OF JENMAR.clex_monkie89 on July 20th, 2006 04:10 am (UTC)
It IS. There's a certain romantic depth to her platonic Winchester love. If that makes sense.

It makes total sense and I know exactly what you mean.
Xaaraxaara on July 20th, 2006 04:47 am (UTC)
...and I totally clicked on this one because of the title.

But stayed because of the crack. And the dialogue. Which is, y'know, the whole thing.

I'd quote it back at you, but I'm fairly certain you remember it, and I'd end up copy/pasting the entire story. Just some quick things: I loved the brother dynamic, and the voices--they were totally identifiable even without the usual tags. (Jerk. Bitch.) The fact that you managed to condense an entire story/mystery/supernatural event into just a few lines of banter. The man-bitch of a ping-pong-ball-headed alien. Just, well, okay. It all worked.

Excellent job. :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 20th, 2006 05:16 am (UTC)
...and I totally clicked on this one because of the title.
:D My titles are usually so serious, and I only ever get to suggest the cracked-out ones for other people. But when I write the crack-- Whoo-hoo!

It all worked.
That's the main thing. AND if the 'story' was discernible in all that, even better.

Thank you, xaara! :D
Don't shoot the pianist: Everyday (SPN)northface11 on July 23rd, 2006 03:59 am (UTC)
*awards bonus points* I knew who was who halfway through the first line. A series of TV ad-based ficlets? Sounds good--commercials are often scarier than monsters!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 23rd, 2006 05:29 pm (UTC)
I knew who was who halfway through the first line.
Whoo-hoo! *celebrates*

Sounds good--commercials are often scarier than monsters!
Yeah, I already tackled the Lunesta butterfly in the previous fic. The Burger King mascot? OMG-- not only freaky, but why does the AD company not know he's freaky? What is WRONG with them? :0
cindy: the dean show - dean and samtsuki_no_bara on July 23rd, 2006 05:29 am (UTC)
we don't have jack-in-the-box out here, but my sister used to live in la and referred to it as crack-in-the-ass, which is what i always want to call it now, so i read "crackfic" and thought "well, of COURSE." >.<

but! crack aside, really nice dialogue, very winchestery and distinct.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 23rd, 2006 05:30 pm (UTC)
Haha! Thank you, Tsuki! "Crack-in-the-ass" is totally, cruelly funny. Although they DO have a varied menu, not that I sample it. (I sound like Dean in denial now) :D
Pheebs1pheebs1 on July 23rd, 2006 10:06 am (UTC)
Ha ha ha! Totally worked. I love dialogue only pieces.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 23rd, 2006 05:33 pm (UTC)
Thank you, Pheebs! I only have the one other dialogue-only thing, which is this Wincest piece. Some others have come really close, but not quite just dialogue.

It's a fun challenge, though, I admit. :)