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02 April 2012 @ 10:33 am
The Real LJ Idol: "Clarity"  
Clarity
real lj idol | week 21 | 1024 words
Bridge – an Idol Intersection with similiesslip (her story is here).

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I think my wife is having an affair...Collapse )



Both similiesslip and my story can be voted for along with other fine entries here.

 
 
 
m_malcontentm_malcontent on April 5th, 2012 08:11 pm (UTC)
You write men very well. I can feel this.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on April 6th, 2012 05:15 am (UTC)
That is a high compliment! Thank you very much!
the_day_setupthe_day_setup on April 5th, 2012 09:09 pm (UTC)
The two of you wrote a great pair o' perspectives this week.

I would also be grateful if asteroids fell on every golf course everywhere at once. Of course, they'd still rebuild the damn things.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on April 6th, 2012 05:18 am (UTC)
Thank you-- and thanks for taking the time to comment, too. :)

I would also be grateful if asteroids fell on every golf course everywhere at once.
Me too, though I'm sure I'd feel even more strongly if I were forced to schmooze my life away on one of those things while my family grew up without me.

Televised golf is one of the biggest mysteries ever to me. It comes very close to approximating the thrill of watching paint dry. Only watching realtime hobby-fishing would be worse. :0
whipchickwhipchick on April 5th, 2012 09:28 pm (UTC)
So neat to see the two sides of the story, and I love how the intersection itself reminds us that the story isn't as easy as one person thinks it is.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on April 6th, 2012 05:20 am (UTC)
the intersection itself reminds us that the story isn't as easy as one person thinks it is.
Once you see how blind they are to certain aspects of each other's POV, you realize how they found themselves in this situation. Neither was seeing the whole picture, and some of the missing pieces were crucial!
medleymistymedleymisty on April 6th, 2012 01:14 am (UTC)
I must admit my first instinct was to not immediately like your character. I can't empathize with the whole house, kids, job, conforming to social expectations thing at all.

But you managed to make me sympathize with your character somehow. :)

I'm glad that it ends well and with hope. When I was younger, I thought that if my husband ever cheated on me I'd explode and go insane. And I've never been tried, and hopefully never will be, but I wonder if I could react with the grace and understanding that your character does.

Awesome writing. :)

Also, it's been interesting to see how people intersect. Like I read the comments and your replies to them, and it seems like you had a pretty different process than lrig_rorrim and I did. I should bring that up in the Green Room one day and see what people say.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on April 6th, 2012 05:25 am (UTC)
I can't empathize with the whole house, kids, job, conforming to social expectations thing at all.
I don't much either, but for some people it's very real-- especially if you think the expectations are coming from your spouse, as both people here do. That's where much of the trouble lies for this couple.

I'm glad I made you feel for Harold, and his unintentional part in the whole mess. Most people never intend to find themselves at the places they somehow arrive, and sometimes the consequences can be terrible.

Also, it's been interesting to see how people intersect. Like I read the comments and your replies to them, and it seems like you had a pretty different process than lrig_rorrim and I did.
We did, though ours was very collaborative-- and I've seem from other entries that the collaboration was rather loose. The challenge doesn't specify, only that you somehow intersect and that you each write one of the two prompts. It's always an education to me to see how other people approach that, and what their results are like.
dblicherdblicher on April 15th, 2012 05:25 pm (UTC)
This was a great way of teaming on these two topics. I like the two voices, and i find the husband more sympathetic than I'd expected. Nice work.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on April 15th, 2012 07:29 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

It's sad to think of two people getting so far apart because both of them are paying attention to the wrong things (and not even realizing it). But I think it's all-too-common.

This intersection was more tightly coupled than the one I did for this week, partly because this week's was the second one (as in, you're kidding. AGAIN?) and also because both my partner and I were gone a lot around Easter. But after seeing the range of how other people did the intersection, it was nice to try both styles. :)