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16 March 2012 @ 08:15 pm
The Real LJ Idol: "Brutus"  
Brutus
Real lj idol | week 19 | 290 words
Et tu, Brute?

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The room suddenly seemed too small, and the feeling of being watched by hundreds of eyes was like a prickling at the back of Brutus' skull.

The words came for him, then: "Et tu, Brute?"

Brutus took a deep breath, feeling the weight of the moment.

What should he say?

Was he ready? Truly ready to spend the rest of his life with a man who was pretentious enough to fold Latin into their wedding ceremony (or to use it for irony, which Brutus never really understood anyway, so wasn't that just as bad)?

Could he be happy with a man who preferred books to baseball, hiking to hotdogs, and who actually watched Masterpiece Theater on purpose?

The kind of man (another thought reminded him) who never minded Brutus' ridiculous name, and who sometimes called him Bruto The Magnificent and drew pictures of him with a mask and a superhero cape to match? Who had also sketched a cartoon of him as Bigfoot or a bear or something, living in a cave littered with dead mathematical proofs?

Who let Brutus turn the spare bedroom into his own robot-hobby workshop, and had only once complained when Brutus used the premium-bond paper to scribble page after page of differential equations?

The man Brutus loved waking up next to every morning, and who thought Brutus was handsome and wonderful and did have a sense of humor? Who taught himself about songbirds and muscle cars, just so he'd have more conversational topics in common with Brutus' father?

The minister and Jeff were still waiting for an answer, and Brutus hoped he hadn't taken too long.

His reply to Jeff—to the world—was the only one he'd ever hoped to give:

"Yes. I do."



I went for the literal meaning of the quote, here: You also, Brutus? or And you, Brutus? because I wanted to write about something other than betrayal. If you enjoyed this story, community members can vote for it along with the other fine entries here.

 
 
 
baxaphobiabaxaphobia on March 17th, 2012 04:21 am (UTC)
A really great take on the topic! Smiles!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 17th, 2012 05:47 am (UTC)
Thank you! It seemed like it would be fun to do a very literal interpretation of the prompt, but use it for something good instead of bad.

Glad you enjoyed it!
ecosopherecosopher on March 17th, 2012 06:45 am (UTC)
This left me with a warm fuzzy feeling. A really sweet little story :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 17th, 2012 03:50 pm (UTC)
Yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and that it came off as I'd hoped. :)
nodressrehersalnodressrehersal on March 17th, 2012 12:49 pm (UTC)
Oh, good one!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 17th, 2012 03:51 pm (UTC)
Using classic quotes for good and not evil-- who could resist?
A Sentient Being: Sad Cuppiealien_infinity on March 17th, 2012 03:10 pm (UTC)
Yay!

I enjoyed your happy take on the prompt. ^_^
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 17th, 2012 03:53 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Finally, a chance for a Brutus to do the right thing instead of betrayal!
cindy: cartoon headtsuki_no_bara on March 17th, 2012 04:40 pm (UTC)
i went from "ooh, julius caesar fanfic!" to "julius caesar au!" to "OH MY GOD THIS IS SO SWEET I CANNOT HANDLE IT". so two thumbs up for tweaking all my expectations. also, it's very, very cute, and in not a lot of words gives us good information about the kind of person brutus is and also the kind of person jeff is. (and also a bit about brutus' dad!) well done. :D
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 17th, 2012 07:17 pm (UTC)
Haha! I wanted the beginning to seem as if it could be a retelling of Julius Caesar, and then just as easily be a big moment in a completely different setting.

This was also a lot of fun to write, in showing both main characters by implication and then some of Brutus' dad (whom you sense is probably intimidating in some way, even if it's just out of awkward silences whenever he's around).

I'm so glad you liked it, and you got absolutely everything out of I that I put into it! Yay!
the key of the day and the lock of the nightlocknkey on March 17th, 2012 08:15 pm (UTC)
Eeee! This is a lovely homage to all the reasons a person says, "I do."
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 17th, 2012 08:45 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

All the things that two people become together that are so much more than each of them is alone. ♥

Thanks for reading!
basric: Et tu brutebasric on March 18th, 2012 04:19 am (UTC)
(=: x 2
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 18th, 2012 05:19 am (UTC)
Thank you!

Love the frog with the quote!
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 18th, 2012 08:37 am (UTC)
Thank you! I figured Brutus deserved the chance to be something other than a villain, for a change. :D
Myrnamyrna_bird on March 18th, 2012 10:21 pm (UTC)
Wonderful. Sweet and yay! I loved it.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 19th, 2012 03:14 am (UTC)
Thank you very much!
whipchickwhipchick on March 19th, 2012 02:20 am (UTC)
That's really sweet! And also really true, that when we sign on for someone, we're committing to the parts of them that bother us as much as the parts we love - I love how this story could go either way before it turns toward togetherness :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 19th, 2012 03:18 am (UTC)
that when we sign on for someone, we're committing to the parts of them that bother us as much as the parts we love

Oh, yes-- the parts that annoy us or give us doubts, as well as the parts that we could never have enough of, even in a lifetime.

Some people go through their wedding ceremonies full speed down the tracks, and other stumble along like deer in headlights. But there are always a few who have that "whole life flashing before me" kind of moment where the good and the bad war with each other at the worst possible moment.

Let's hope it truly seemed brief to Jeff. ;)
Port: happy readingdesertport on March 20th, 2012 03:24 am (UTC)
I love how you just described two whole personalities in the space between wedding vows. And I laughed when I realized at the beginning that no, this wasn't Julius Caesar fanfic. :D
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 20th, 2012 04:31 am (UTC)
Haha! That's what tsuki_no_bara was expecting too, and I wanted the beginning to imply the possibility of being fictionalized history.

But I liked ultimately using the question for an entirely different reason, rather than the expected revenge story.

I'm glad both personalities came through so vividly (both the good and bad sides). It's a fine line, getting enough detail there without making the reader wonder whether the wedding guests have left by then.
Kristenpixiebelle on March 20th, 2012 04:34 am (UTC)
I really liked this take on the topic! Very sweet and creative. It made me smile :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 20th, 2012 04:41 am (UTC)
Yay! I'm glad it seems to be leaving such a happy feeling. :)
With grace in your heart and flowers in your hairlilycobalt on March 20th, 2012 01:59 pm (UTC)
Cute! :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 20th, 2012 05:03 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
Robinarobina1984 on March 20th, 2012 06:44 pm (UTC)
If nothing else, this was a relief after all the betrayals this week! Loved it!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 20th, 2012 07:36 pm (UTC)
I thought it might be a nice contrast, because wow-- I'm sure many of the stories are going to be angst and are going to make me angry on behalf of the wronged!

Thanks for reading. :)
A Karmic Sandbox: May Daykarmasoup on March 20th, 2012 09:48 pm (UTC)
I love this so much. Taking it all, for good and bad, for better and worse... an amusing, tender, honest tribute to genuine true lovers. Just adorable.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on March 20th, 2012 10:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm especially glad that you liked the glimpses of background for the characters, and felt that they added up to something special and worthwhile where "Yes" is the only possible good answer. :)