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14 February 2006 @ 10:39 pm
Supernatural "Zombies" Drabble  
Title: No Perfect Evil
Author: HalfshellVenus
Category: Sam & Dean (Genfic, Drabble)
Rating: PG
Author’s Notes: Written for the supernatural100 challenge, “Zombies.”

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Moving slowly, with deadly malice, the zombie returns in search of prey.

Her eyes are vacant in the moonlight, her skin sagging and blotchy with death. Sam distracts her, and Dean attacks. They bind her and douse her for burning, this creature who was once a daughter or wife.

There is a rustling behind them as the man from the gas station comes upon the scene. “Paulette!” he cries in anguish, as the match falls and sets the night ablaze.

Later, Sam is sick in the privacy of a ditch. Dean kneels beside him, stumbling over every apology he knows.



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The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on February 15th, 2006 06:46 am (UTC)
Oh. Just...oh. That just rips me open. In the best way.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 15th, 2006 06:57 am (UTC)
"Zombies" drove me to the angsty place instead of the Cracked-out place, for some reason.

But... you know there have got to be nights that turn out like this one :(
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on February 15th, 2006 07:02 am (UTC)
There are more nights like this than the cracked-out ones, I can guarantee. Far more nights like this.
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on February 15th, 2006 07:09 am (UTC)
*coughs*

Not that I know from personal experience, or anything. :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 15th, 2006 07:14 am (UTC)
Not that I know from personal experience, or anything. :)

No, me either :)

But dead fathers in the water and burning girlfriends and the food stores of Wendigos... there have to be a lot of emotionally rough days in the Winchesters' line of work.
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on February 15th, 2006 07:17 am (UTC)
Which is why I'm always torn between admiring Sam for breaking away, or admiring Dean for staying. :) Which one's stronger, you know?
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 15th, 2006 05:20 pm (UTC)
Which is why I'm always torn between admiring Sam for breaking away, or admiring Dean for staying. :) Which one's stronger, you know?

And it's a great question, because they're different kinds of strengths. For Sam, it's leaving everything he knows and everyone he loves. He ran away from his entire support system, even though it was never exactly what he wanted.

For Dean, choosing to stay in such a hard life-- where all of your real rewards come from knowing that it's right, and not from external validation (other than his Dad, and he doesn't seem to be getting quite enough of that).
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on February 15th, 2006 05:46 pm (UTC)
Precisely. :)

(other than his Dad, and he doesn't seem to be getting quite enough of that)
*laughs* Yeah. There's more than one reason I have issues with John Winchester.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 15th, 2006 06:04 pm (UTC)
(other than his Dad, and he doesn't seem to be getting quite enough of that)
*laughs* Yeah. There's more than one reason I have issues with John Winchester.


We'll be seeing more of him next week, apparently, and I hope they don't screw all of that up.

The way Sam keeps hammering Dean for "being desperate for Dad's approval" means it's more likely that Dean craves that but doesn't get enough of it. You aren't usually desperate for what you have.

Which is why I hope they don't warp things with his return. Because there are already times where I feel like Dean's character is a moving target (rather than just complex), and that makes me nervous for the quality of the show's writing.
The Grammarian about whom your mother warned you.acostilow on February 15th, 2006 06:11 pm (UTC)
The way Sam keeps hammering Dean for "being desperate for Dad's approval" means it's more likely that Dean craves that but doesn't get enough of it. You aren't usually desperate for what you have.
No, no you aren't. And it hurts me everytime I see that emotional lock-down when they speak, because John raised Dean as a soldier, not a son.
*laughs* Issues.

I'm actually interested in his return, if only for the hope that one of them punches him. Hard. Sam! Kick more ass!

But I get what you're saying. It kinda seems like the show focuses more on Sam, as if they consider him the stronger character, and Dean just gets the potshots.
i want to cause a ruckusgeminigrl11 on February 15th, 2006 07:17 am (UTC)
Oh, this is . . . just so much angst in so few words. Such scars they carry.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 15th, 2006 05:16 pm (UTC)
Oh, this is . . . just so much angst in so few words. Such scars they carry.
Other people's scars, as well as their own :(

Haven't forgotten about your drabble, by the way-- just haven't had a chance to look it over yet. But I will get to it. Do you need it sooner now?
i want to cause a ruckusgeminigrl11 on February 15th, 2006 05:30 pm (UTC)
Jumping on the bandwagon above - I wonder if Dean didn't so much CHOOSE to stay as feel there were no other choices? And then he justifies his life in the only ways he can. Sam seems to have been the only one to have envisioned a different life - probably for all of them, but he could only save himself. I think, in a lot of ways, that would have been harder . . .

Re: my drabble - there's no rush at all! And in fact, I wrote a 100 word one last night :), so might send that one, too, if it's ok.

The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 15th, 2006 06:06 pm (UTC)
Re: my drabble - there's no rush at all! And in fact, I wrote a 100 word one last night :), so might send that one, too, if it's ok.

Please! I have a better chance with that one, because there's no question of whether to try to make it shorter.

The 300-word one you were toying with cutting down, which means a much more thorough review (as in, from a hard edit perspective)-- even if ultimately it turns out it would be better to leave it at 300 :)
Are we back to hos over bros?lissa_bear on February 15th, 2006 02:21 pm (UTC)
Love the ending. Great little drabble.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 15th, 2006 05:18 pm (UTC)
Thank you, lissa_bear!

Their job serves an important purpose, but I ache for them over how hard it would be to carry it out.
Portdesertport on February 16th, 2006 07:36 am (UTC)
Wow! Great drabble! So much was packed into such a small box, and it worked perfectly. Packed a real whollop too; poor Sam! And Dean, of course, right where he always is, beside Sam. Brilliant way of alluding to Jessica and their mom in a way that brings back to them all of the horror of those experiences. Love how such a spare story says so much. Thanks for sharing it!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 16th, 2006 05:25 pm (UTC)
So much was packed into such a small box, and it worked perfectly.

Thank you! They're such a challenge, especially to get so many ideas out there and complete the setting in so few words. They should feel like a mini-story or a little vignette when they work.

Packed a real whollop too; poor Sam! And Dean, of course, right where he always is, beside Sam.
What a hard life they have-- probably moreso for Sam. Their knowledge tells them they're doing the right thing. But there are times when the heart must be in doubt :)

Thanks for your wonderful comments :)
paintercrow on February 19th, 2006 03:21 am (UTC)
Paulette. A name makes it too real and so sad. Thanks!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Gen: icon by Tinamishihalfshellvenus on February 19th, 2006 05:54 am (UTC)
Paulette. A name makes it too real
And she was, once-- and still is to that man.

This drabble shows one of those times where, even though you know you're doing the right thing, it doesn't feel right.

I expect that the Winchesters have more days like that than most of us do...
tyrical: AP_aJolietyrical on April 14th, 2006 01:56 am (UTC)
So I re-read this a few times and I still can't figure it out.

I get that they were chasing a zombie but that zombie was somebody that was loved and a loved one saw her burning corpse and followed along to save her or join her... and Dean is apologizing because...he lit the match, Sam got sick, Sam saw the burning man, all three or was is something completely different?

I am just a tad confused. Help please!

Or am I just being a bit to literal? I do admit to imbibing a bit of the alcohol as I'm reading.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on April 16th, 2006 05:53 am (UTC)
I get that they were chasing a zombie but that zombie was somebody that was loved and a loved one saw her burning corpse and followed along to save her or join her... and Dean is apologizing because...he lit the match, Sam got sick, Sam saw the burning man, all three or was is something completely different?
The zombie they were destroying (and she truly was) didn't appear that way to the man who loved her. He recognized her as the person she used to be, and their extermination of her was just a heartbreaking shockwave to him.

Sam's getting sick is because of the dichotomy of killing what is evil and knowing that it wasn't always so-- and that it was what they were doing (even though it was right) looked horrific and evil to that man. As if they were monsters killing a (to him) viable person that he loved.

And Dean's apology is because, although it probably troubles Dean just as much as Sam... he'll suck it up and brood silently over it, while Sam on the other hand seems to need comforting and someone to try to make the world fair and right. It's the younger/older sibling dynamic, you could say.

Sorry for the confusion. Sometimes the drabbles aren't always clear to everyone (the curse sometimes of the 100-word limit).
Sar: remembrancesargraf on July 4th, 2006 02:50 pm (UTC)
Whew. It hurts so much, because I can see something like that happening all too clearly. And Sam having to burn the remnants of someone's beloved wife unintentionally right in front of that man's eyes... Talk about salt on the wound. It would take him a good while to get over that.

BTW, I just want to say that I adore the way you write Sam. I truly do. You have such a clear view of him; you honor him and yet don't glorify him. I adore that about your writing.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on July 4th, 2006 08:24 pm (UTC)
And Sam having to burn the remnants of someone's beloved wife unintentionally right in front of that man's eyes... Talk about salt on the wound. It would take him a good while to get over that.
So much more than Dean, I think Sam's mind would go immediately to "What does this look like to other people?" rather than "We're doing what needs to be done-- anyone can see that." I think that man's pain would be Sam's the instant Sam caught sight of him. God, I'm depressing myself all over again now.

BTW, I just want to say that I adore the way you write Sam. I truly do. You have such a clear view of him; you honor him and yet don't glorify him. I adore that about your writing.
Wow. I am truly honored. I have a deeper resonance with Dean, so this is wonderful to hear. I understand Sam's feelings and motivations (they actually make more sense to me than some of Dean's), but on the flip side-- Dean's pain is too large to ignore.

I do try for an even-handed approach in the writing. Sometimes, I'm writing the character as he sees himself (John at times, for instance), rather than how other people would interpret his actions/choices. That's the crux of so much human misunderstanding-- That what WE think we're saying/doing is not always at all how other people see it. And we... are not always right about ourselves. :(