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06 January 2008 @ 01:00 pm
Supernatural Slash Drabble: Burning For You (PG-13)  
Title: Burning For You
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Sam/Dean (Wincest)
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Drabble on "Breathe" for eponin10. Happy belated birthday!
Author's Note: The title is from Blue Oyster Cult, and is perfect for this drabble.

x-x-x-x-x

The night outside is forgotten in the hot, slick rush of Dean's skin over Sam's. Too many weeks since the last time—broken promises to Stop this once and for all already lost to denial after the first desperate kiss.

This— this— is the hopeless/perfect/wrongness they've tried so hard to escape. Every fire-bright look, every searing-silk touch just burns the truth deeper : No-one else ever, not like this.

Dean strokes over Sam, his mouth branding Sam's lips, his neck, his soul. Then he moves, heat rolling through Sam with every so-good-yes-yes thrust.

Sam has to remind himself to breathe...


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Deadbeat Nymph: sam dean close facesdeadbeat_nymph on January 6th, 2008 09:05 pm (UTC)
Oh, that is hot, sad, and beautiful.

(Sorry, I know that's crappy feedback, but I'm absolutely worn, but I still wanted to say something because I was moved. :P )
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 6th, 2008 09:05 pm (UTC)
All feedback is good feedback unless it's a troll! And it is, all of those things at once. :)
(no subject) - deadbeat_nymph on January 6th, 2008 10:40 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Gretagretazreta on January 6th, 2008 09:16 pm (UTC)
Eee. I really like the desperation, the sense that they're fighting against wanting this, but just can't stop because they're so absolutely drawn to each other.
It's really beautiful, and I can't help noticing that I just used half a drabble to explain what I got from it and you did it all in 100 perfect words.

It's really hot, as well, visceral, and you really get a sense of how they're essential to each other, deny it as they might.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 6th, 2008 09:50 pm (UTC)
the sense that they're fighting against wanting this, but just can't stop because they're so absolutely drawn to each other.
This one is all about that conflict, and the sheer power of want and completion that pulls them back again and again in spite of themselves-- doomed to really stop, try as they might.

So glad you liked it!
(no subject) - cass404 on January 7th, 2008 06:24 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - halfshellvenus on January 7th, 2008 06:37 am (UTC) (Expand)
The Huntress: Sam - Hearthuntress69 on January 6th, 2008 09:49 pm (UTC)
I so love what you write and you say so much in such few words...and I have to remind myself to breathe LOL...
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 6th, 2008 09:51 pm (UTC)
and I have to remind myself to breathe LOL...
Yay! I want the reader to feel as pulled in and overwhelmed there as Sam does, to know how hopeless it is to even think they could ever really stop.

Thank you!
jelly babies to manual: approval from dean thumbs upthehighwaywoman on January 6th, 2008 09:59 pm (UTC)
*purrrrr* Hot, desperate, beautiful!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 7th, 2008 06:38 am (UTC)
Mmmmm-- the desperation of need AND of inescapability makes for such a nice, angsty combination. :) Glad you liked it!
Entendre? Make mine a double.: SN brothers beauty bothdeirdre_c on January 6th, 2008 10:40 pm (UTC)
Yum. So inevitable and burning. Great one!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 7th, 2008 06:39 am (UTC)
so inevitable
And that's one of the reasons why the Wincest sells itself-- more than just hotness and prettiness, it's that deep-down inevitability of it that grabs me every time. ♥
layne: spn  speciallovelayne67 on January 6th, 2008 10:55 pm (UTC)
I have to remind myself to breathe, too ...
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 7th, 2008 08:05 am (UTC)
*dances* Definitely the effect I want.

And speaking of breathless... your icon, caught in a moment where that touch could be serious, makes my heart stop. ♥
who breaks a butterfly upon a wheellaminy on January 6th, 2008 11:10 pm (UTC)
Without reading the author's note, I started singing the song right when I read the title. So, that was good.

But oh my god, this is just gorgeous. Gorgeous. Perfect. It's all just dripping with awesomeness. So, so good.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 7th, 2008 08:07 am (UTC)
I started singing the song right when I read the title.
Talkin' 'bout my generation... :D I'm sure most readers don't know that BOC song, though I'm personally just waiting for it to show up in one of the episodes!

Your comments made me dance inside-- somehow, getting that reaction for a drabble is just all the more thrilling. Thank you!
(no subject) - laminy on January 7th, 2008 08:11 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - halfshellvenus on January 8th, 2008 08:31 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - laminy on January 8th, 2008 08:35 pm (UTC) (Expand)
dc_longwing on January 7th, 2008 12:27 am (UTC)
Jesus, girl. So damn hot. Goosebumps? What goosebumps? Oh. Those.
Me writing "Jesus, girl. So damn hot." is a familiar response to your stuff. Thanks for all the great fic in 2007 and here's to a fabulous 2008 for you and yours.
Thanks,
DC
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 24th, 2008 01:44 am (UTC)
Thank you, DC! The new year is starting off a LOT slower than I'd like, but I hope that will change. *keeps fingers crossed* *tries to lure back porn muse*
eponin10 on January 7th, 2008 12:52 am (UTC)
You rock! :) This is fabulous! Thank you so much. :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 24th, 2008 01:45 am (UTC)
You're welcome (much too belatedly), and I hoped it helped make you feel honored for being you. :)

Here's to a year for you that doesn't follow the last few weeks in any way, shape or form!
(no subject) - eponin10 on January 24th, 2008 01:25 pm (UTC) (Expand)
pbwhispererpbwhisperer on January 7th, 2008 01:08 am (UTC)
Breathe
Wonderful use of language, as always. Your prose is really poetry, each word, each phase so lyrical and evocative, just wow! and wishing your a wonderful 2008, even surpassing your fondest wishes!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam & Dean Genhalfshellvenus on January 24th, 2008 07:21 pm (UTC)
Re: Breathe
Thank you so much for your very kind words. And happy 2008 to you too! :)
subtly_modded: we're goin' to the Winchesterssubtly_modded on January 7th, 2008 02:50 am (UTC)
Wow. That's hot and sweet and just about perfect. The last line got me. Thank you!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 24th, 2008 07:22 pm (UTC)
So glad you liked it-- thanks for reading!
Emerald Amber: nowsammyemeraldamber on January 7th, 2008 03:03 am (UTC)
Remind me to breathe too! Very hot.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 24th, 2008 07:22 pm (UTC)
If only this would stretch into the longer porn-- that's a struggle at the moment, but thank goodness it still comes out in these torrid little snippets. :)
tyricaltyrical on January 7th, 2008 05:02 am (UTC)
I love how much feeling of need-want-can't-have that is in this. This need that overcomes all sense, all reason, all intelligence. It is all right there.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 25th, 2008 12:57 am (UTC)
need that overcomes all sense, all reason, all intelligence.
Yes! Knowing that you shouldn't-- that you even made deals with yourself and each other that you wouldn't-- but being unable to let go of it... this is one of the many ways to see Sam/Dean that I find so irresistible.
zenamydog: J2 Doorzenamydog on January 7th, 2008 05:24 am (UTC)
Small on the word count, but huge on its impact.

Well done!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 25th, 2008 12:57 am (UTC)
Thank you, Zena! Ooh, it's amazing how far 100 words can go sometimes... Whoo!
shaitanah: michael/mahoneshaitanah on January 7th, 2008 06:31 pm (UTC)
Wow, this is incredibly hot! The epitome of hotness! XDDD
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Sam/Dean kisshalfshellvenus on January 25th, 2008 12:58 am (UTC)
Oooh! What lovely praise-- I definitely wanted hot to come through along with all that needy desperation. Thank you!