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16 November 2007 @ 11:46 am
Prison Break Gen Fiction: Angels Rendered (Poem)  
Title: Angels Rendered
Author: HalfshellVenus
Character: Michael (Gen, Angst)
Rating: PG
Summary: Michael hopes now for things he doesn't even believe in…
Author's Notes: This was the poetry part of Challenge #8 for pbficsurvivor. The other parts were a drabble and an all-dialogue story. Also for my prisonbreak100 claim of Lincoln and Michael, this is #55, "Spirit."

x-x-x-x-x

In impossible dreams,
the doomed can be saved—
mounting trickery and tenacity
as an attack on impenetrable death.

In the unforgiving reality,
others are lost along the way.
The smallest ripple becomes a tsunami,
a diversion turns deadly… there's no going back.

A legendary robber becomes an ally,
a friend, then is lost and bitterly mourned.
A key becomes a person, becomes desperation,
and self-betrayal brings forth a nearly fatal end.

Within the deadly walls of SONA,
Michael wishes for things he never thought true.
The afterlife he doesn't believe in
could heal his mistakes— even make his victims whole.

He hopes Veronica has found her fiancé,
that Westmoreland and his daughter now dance along the stars.
Today, his heart heavier than ever, he imagines Sara
held close by her father, everything forgiven between them at last.

In the wake of all his planning lies nothing but pain,
a bloody trail of loss and sorrow leading back to Lincoln's fate.
Lincoln lives, but Michael no longer deserves to—
it's on his hands, all those choices, they're imprinted on his soul.

Please let there be something more. He clings to it now,
to the idea of reparations to all he's wronged.
He doesn't pray to the silence (where he hears no answer),
but still he hopes: Let them find the peace he cannot.


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The Good, The Bad and The Lanathelana on November 16th, 2007 07:53 pm (UTC)
Which reminds me that I'm still bitter that they never went to visit Westmoreland's daughter and apparently never even thought of it.

*is bitter*

Also, unsurprisingly you are very good with this :)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: MichaelInBarshalfshellvenus on November 16th, 2007 08:23 pm (UTC)
Which reminds me that I'm still bitter that they never went to visit Westmoreland's daughter and apparently never even thought of it.
!!! I'd forgotten about that! *is all bitter now too* *remembers she was dying of cancer and is even more bitter* *thwaps stupid money-chasing idiots*

Also, unsurprisingly you are very good with this :)
:D I have to hope those skills aren't entirely dead, because I've channeled all my writing into fanfic for the past few years. I'm lucky to get out a single poem a year!
The Good, The Bad and The Lanathelana on November 16th, 2007 08:28 pm (UTC)
Seriously, would it have killed them to include a random "Michael reads the paper, sees her name in the death notices and wangst about how he didn't get around seeing her and she died without knowing that her father loved her"?

*hates*

Maybe I need to bribe somebody into gen-ficcing that for me. On the other hand... it might just make me bitter again.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: PB Final Hughalfshellvenus on November 16th, 2007 09:53 pm (UTC)
Seriously, would it have killed them to include a random "Michael reads the paper, sees her name in the death notices and wangst about how he didn't get around seeing her and she died without knowing that her father loved her"?

See? We've had these quibbles over SPN this season too, i.e., that it doesn't take much to hit your loose threads, or to clarify the character intent in something. But in the hands of lesser writers, it goes right out the window without anyone even trying. :(

A moment of Michael remembering that he didn't visit Westmoreland's daughter would have been the perfect way, plot-wise, to handle that he wound up with other (sometimes deadlier) priorities.
The Good, The Bad and The Lanathelana on November 16th, 2007 10:01 pm (UTC)
Exactly. It could have been a great way of showing that being in this high speed situation forced him to give up all the little things. Like doing something decent for Westmoreland :(
tyricaltyrical on November 17th, 2007 12:49 am (UTC)
It is the way of life that when presented with something bigger the little things fall to the way side.

It is with that in mind I could forgive Michael anything but I would not forget. It's the writers hopes that our compassion for everything Michael has been through will be enough to forgive the transgressions of being an absolute ass.

The one thing I have always envied/admired/saddened by was Michael's ability to do anything he puts his mind to. Regardless of the consequences. Even if it makes him partly a monster.

In this piece at least he recognizes these things in himself and does not regret his actions but regrets what things decisions have cost.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: MichaelInBarshalfshellvenus on November 22nd, 2007 08:31 am (UTC)
It's the writers hopes that our compassion for everything Michael has been through will be enough to forgive the transgressions of being an absolute ass.
It's almost as if, so long as he suffers emotionally from the terrible outcomes of his choices, we should forgive him-- because he's tender-hearted. Of course, it tends to be after the fact-- he can be ruthless when it serves him. Not unlike Lincoln in this regard-- Michael thinks about the evil choices more than Lincoln (instead of that knee-jerk impulse), but he still does them and then angsts about it endlessly afterward. The angst doesn't usually keep him from doing the wrong thing, any more than Lincoln's inability to control his impulses does.

Regardless of the consequences. Even if it makes him partly a monster.
I don't envy him that last part-- because that suffering falls to other people, often innocent people. One should never be that ruthless.

and does not regret his actions but regrets what things decisions have cost.
For him, I think it'll always be "Lincoln survived" outweighing all the other outcomes. Whereas for Lincoln himself, it will always be the opposite-- "Michael should have let me die," because he'll never see anything as being worth those costs.

That dichotomy is one of the things I love about the show, though. It's destined to pit the brothers against each other at least underneath the surface, which serves fanfic writers very well even if the show's writers might not choose to do much with it.
crowleyangel on November 22nd, 2007 05:00 am (UTC)
"In the wake of all his planning lies nothing but pain,
a bloody trail of loss and sorrow

it's on his hands, all those choices, they're imprinted on his soul.

A legendary robber becomes an ally,
a friend, then is lost and bitterly mourned.
A key becomes a person, becomes desperation,
and self-betrayal brings forth a nearly fatal end"

These are my favourite lines in this. Good job with the emotion and pain and despair. *hugs* be proud.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: MichaelInBarshalfshellvenus on November 22nd, 2007 08:33 am (UTC)
Thank you! I especially like hearing that the emotion comes out here, because that's really the heart of the poem under all the words.

Writing a poem for fanfic was a tough assignment. I've written two others, more accidentally, and one of those is not quite a poem (Supernatural), and it's either loved or shunned depending on the reader. ;)