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03 November 2007 @ 02:15 pm
Supernatural Gen Drabble: The Unopened Door (John)  
Title: The Unopened Door
Author: HalfshellVenus
Character: John (Gen)
Rating: PG
Summary: For 100_ghosts "Skeletons in the closet" challenge.

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In a library in Tallahassee, John notices for the first time in years that a woman's pretty. He'd forgotten what that was like.

Her eyes are silver, almost eerie beneath raven hair. But the effect becomes beauty when she smiles at his stack of books. "That's a lot of reading."

"Just browsing through."

They get to talking about the weather and other chit-chat, and she's bold enough to show her interest: "I'm Tessa and I'm single. How 'bout you?"

My wife burned to death on the ceiling, and I'm hunting whatever killed her. "Widowed," he says darkly.

The conversation's over.


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Cathryn (formerly catslash): Jeffrey Dean Morganremindmeofthe on February 14th, 2008 07:05 am (UTC)
This is so interesting to me, because it embodies exactly what I was talking about someone about the other day, how John buried his grief in hunting and never processed it in a healthy way. This little snapshot could just as easily take place two years or twenty years after Mary's death, because he never dealt with it.

I love reading well-written drabbles, because I know first-hand how damn hard it is to find a concept small enough to fit into a hundred words but big enough to still be a story. You did really well with this one.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on February 18th, 2008 09:05 am (UTC)
I think you have the same gorgeous John icon that I do, or very nearly!

This little snapshot could just as easily take place two years or twenty years after Mary's death, because he never dealt with it.
Yes! That was one of the ideas behind it-- I thought the reader would be able to see that how much later after Mary's death this happened didn't really matter. The grief (and the guilt) was buried, always waiting to surface unchanged.

because I know first-hand how damn hard it is to find a concept small enough to fit into a hundred words but big enough to still be a story.
That is one of the parts of the drabble challenge that I so love-- getting a complete image or idea in 100 words, and making it come out strongly enough that it feels like a real story. I used to read these occasionally at ff.net, and wonder what the point was-- until I read some at LiveJournal that were done well. Then it all made sense.
     Mandya_phoenixdragon on June 8th, 2008 09:16 am (UTC)
Wow...

*hugs*
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Johnhalfshellvenus on June 17th, 2008 07:54 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

It's sad, but so typical, that John's insistence on getting revenge for Mary's death means that he'll never move beyond her. He's trapped himself by making sure he never lets go of that tragedy... and it'll stand between him and any hope of every finding someone else. :(