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06 December 2005 @ 10:33 pm
Prison Break Fanfiction: Stealth  
Author: HalfshellVenus
Category: C-Note’s POV (Genfic)
Rating: PG
Spoilers: Episodes 1, 8, 9.

Summary: It’s all in who’s paying attention.

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Others thought they had the power inside the pen, but that was all show. Abruzzi ran the P.I. and had the goon gang, and T-Bag and a few others had their own followers. That kind of power was obvious and loud, the kind people expected.

C-Note preferred more subtle methods. He ran the prison’s black market, one of the most flexible tools inside Fox River. He did it quietly and efficiently, knowing who needed what, how to get it, and how to force just a little more payment out of his customers than they’d really planned to give. He had a good system, and he liked how it worked. Nothing wrong with quiet success.

Keen observation was a power all its own, too. That was how C-Note had noticed the individual members of the P.I. team dribbling concrete pebbles all over the yard, a little bit at a time. He’d added 2 and divided by 5 and taken the square-root of everything, and had come up with a quadratic equation that looked a lot like an escape plan.

He’d approached Scofield about it, and once again that ability to see and infer had paid off well. Scofield’s darting eyes and taking too long to form a denial had told C-Note all he’d really needed to know.

So he’d maneuvered his way into the escape, the way he maneuvered contraband inside the pen and had worked his illegal trades outside of it. And he was keeping an eye on things, making sure that train wasn’t about to leave without him.

He was a wolf here among sheep, most of them never looking at the big picture or really asking what was going on beyond meals, smokes and fights. Now Scofield was a little different. He was clever all right, not part of the herd at all but more like a fox, slipping quietly and half-hidden through the woods. But foxes never could help being a little too flashy, no matter how hard they tried. Scofield was soft-spoken and low-key, but his mysterious behaviors were as noticeable as red fur backed up against the browns and greens of a forest floor.

The fox might enjoy being clever, going on about its business and admiring itself. It certainly had the advantage over so many lesser animals, most of which just drifted around and never stopped to notice or to plan.

But make no mistake. All that cleverness wouldn’t make the least bit of difference when the fox found itself lying slack inside the jaws of the larger and deadlier wolf.

The wolf never hunted for pleasure. But it could be strong and swift and sure if it needed to be.

Count on it.

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ex_metallica902 on December 7th, 2005 06:58 am (UTC)
This is the first C-Note fic I've ever seen, and I loved it.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 7th, 2005 07:03 am (UTC)
Thanks! I don't think I've seen one before either.

It just came to me today (I'm on a roll-- check out my homepage with the variety of characters there).

C-Note is much more clever and interesting than most would suspect. And I think he likes it that way.
The Good, The Bad and The Lana: abruzzi kneelingthelana on December 7th, 2005 08:09 am (UTC)
Wheeee, C-Note fic!

Love the metaphers. Though they'd probably be more effective if they didn't immediately make me think of all those children frables where the Fox outmaneuvres the Wolf. Guess C-Note never heard those as a child.

C-Note is fascinating to me. Like, I wonder what exactly his status is among the black inmates. If he their leader? Or just their supplier? Because if he is their leader that would be very impressive since he is a white collar criminal rather than somebody violent.

I also wondered if that pseudo socialist/communist propaganda stuff he is sporting off is something he really believes him or just his way of fronting/throwing people off course. Though if he is a white color criminal it could work that he has a "Stealing from the government/rich insurances is a victimless crime" kind of ideology.

Though that wouldn't gel with his military background as much.

Although I can picture him as the kind of guy who was stealing and selling contraband even back when he was in the army and he was just too good to ever get noticed.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 7th, 2005 09:12 pm (UTC)
I wonder about his position too. I don't think he's their leader, but I do think he's respected. They may not have a leader, and perhaps he's the de facto leader-- but not by his own intention. I think being high-profile works against his preferred method of operation.

Although I can picture him as the kind of guy who was stealing and selling contraband even back when he was in the army and he was just too good to ever get noticed.

Me too. I don't see him as the kind of guy who would stay within the law if he felt he could get away with it. And I think wielding his manipulations is irresistible to him...
The Good, The Bad and The Lanathelana on December 7th, 2005 10:18 pm (UTC)
Maybe killed all the potential black leaders (maybe with some help through fellow racist Bellick turning a blind eye) and that why is held in such high esteem.
The Good, The Bad and The Lanathelana on December 7th, 2005 10:20 pm (UTC)
Grr, I was talking about T-Bag obviously.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 7th, 2005 11:03 pm (UTC)
Boy, I was wondering! I thought, You know, C-note's a really wily guy. But I don't see him being quite so murder-happy.
The Good, The Bad and The Lana: sara happythelana on December 7th, 2005 11:06 pm (UTC)
LOL, no obviously I wasn't thinking about that. But I can picture C-Note rising high because he dropped into some sort of power vacuum if T-Bag got rid of all the potential Adebisis.
miss_mazzie on December 8th, 2005 02:04 pm (UTC)
Wow! You know how to paint an image with words. I loved the idea of "mysterious" Scofield as a "fox, slipping quietly and half-hidden" but can't "help being a little too flashy". And then his relationship to C-Note the wolf: "But make no mistake. All that cleverness wouldn’t make the least bit of difference when the fox found itself lying slack inside the jaws of the larger and deadlier wolf." Thank you! I thought this was great!
miss_mazzie on December 8th, 2005 03:33 pm (UTC)
Venus: I'm not sure why, but the number of comments is not on the index page? Why is that? It doesn't look like any comments have been posted. That's a shame since this is an unusual and well-written fic.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 8th, 2005 05:38 pm (UTC)
Thanks for the comments!

I'd hoped to show how thoroughly C-Note notices just about everything, even when someone as clever as Michael thinks he's being sneaky and that his plotting is "invisible." C-note is sharp.

As for the comments not on the index page... that disappoints me too, but it comes from wanting the comments in my personal journal so I can read them again and again and again (you can see that I love feedback).

If I post the full story using lj-cut on prisonbreak_fic, then the comments will show up there (I just figured out what lj-cut was for about 3 days ago), but after some point (100 posts) I can't retrieve them again.

I agree with you though, I wish the comments reflected in the group so that people would know the stories were being read. Genfic (in fact, non-Michael/Sara) can be a lonely world in this fandom!
shadesofblackooshady_girloo on December 10th, 2005 08:05 pm (UTC)
great fic!
Wentworth has said that Michael made the elaborate plan not considering the fact that he cannot control the pawns in his game and there is human nature. Michael must think most prisoner s are not cunning. yet they are cons! some may be slow and naive (Tweener) but others are shrewd (Charles) observant (C-Note) relentless (T-Bag) and have emotions (Sucre). Mike did not take in account that these are in fact real people, and they’re going to do what they’re going to do. I can’t explain it any better than what C-Note told Michael “Darwin rules inside these walls, Fish. Not Einstein. Darwin.” Survival of the fittest!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 10th, 2005 08:14 pm (UTC)
Re: great fic!
Wentworth has said that Michael made the elaborate plan not considering the fact that he cannot control the pawns in his game and there is human nature.

This is the largest flaw in Michael's plan (aside from the fact that everything in general has to work almost perfectly, and Hello? Murphy's Law?).

Sometimes analytical people forget entirely about psychology, and that force can be as strong as/stronger than logic.
shadesofblackooshady_girloo on December 10th, 2005 08:41 pm (UTC)
Re: great fic!
he based a lot of the plan on time too. and he didn't have many Plan B's...he's lucky he got the tools he needed to get out his cell and still has his male "innocence". but the story is intense when Murphy's Law goes into effect... makes good TV drama.
she said mysteriously: BBMresounding_echo on December 27th, 2005 04:11 pm (UTC)
Oh, you've become my hero with this. I love C-Note, and it seems no one wants to tackle him (especially after his turn in the later episodes). But boy, you tackled him well!

It's interesting. I agree with you that C-Note is a sharp little thing. He's managed to gain a lot of power in a short amount of time, and he even found Michael out. I just can't figure out why the writers gave him such a stupid reason to want to leave...maybe you can write a fic about it...::prods with stick::

Scofield’s darting eyes and taking too long to form a denial had told C-Note all he’d really needed to know.

I liked this line a lot. It's not typical of what we get from Michael in fics, but it's completely in-character. Even great poker players have a tell.

And this is my fav line:

But foxes never could help being a little too flashy, no matter how hard they tried.

heh, flashy little Michael.

He’d added 2 and divided by 5 and taken the square-root of everything, and had come up with a quadratic equation that looked a lot like an escape plan.

This line made me chuckle. I love C-Note's humor. Glad you stuck some in this fic.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 31st, 2005 07:50 pm (UTC)
Oh, you've become my hero with this. I love C-Note, and it seems no one wants to tackle him (especially after his turn in the later episodes). But boy, you tackled him well!

Thank you! Actually, I found him intriguing from the beginning, but these last episodes? Even more so. The show is revealing a little better how unusually clever he is-- it all builds on those earlier glimpses of his exchanges with Michael, where he wanted to know what the medication was for that he was trafficking in, and there was real curiosity behind that question.

Scofield’s darting eyes and taking too long to form a denial had told C-Note all he’d really needed to know.

In my head, that is actually how I remembered the scene playing out-- and really, it was all C-Note needed. He had his suspicions already, and this was the final confirmation.

But foxes never could help being a little too flashy, no matter how hard they tried.

I know, this line is funny-- but also true. At least, to C-Note. Because he notices a lot more than other people would, and all Michael's deliberate attempts at "subtlety" and "flying below the radar" do not succeed when C-Note is doing the watching.

Clad you liked the humor too. C-Note has some interesting possibilities as a character.
tyrical: AP_aJolietyrical on April 14th, 2006 03:41 am (UTC)
OK, Now I need a fox and a wolf icon.

I just loved this. Oh words fail me now but I did.

The parallels between power, the references between the animals.

Oh yeah this, this rocked.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: PB Casthalfshellvenus on April 17th, 2006 03:28 am (UTC)
OK, Now I need a fox and a wolf icon.
XD Yay! That's always a good sign.

The parallels between power, the references between the animals.
The difference between being intelligent, and also being clever. The power of perception vs. the obvious, and what you can do with the power of knowledge if you really know how to use it. I love that C-Note noticed the things that Michael thought were so well-hidden and sneaky. :0

Glad you liked it so much. C-Note has such intriguing capabilities. :D
The Good, The Bad and The Lanathelana on November 10th, 2007 12:53 am (UTC)
Nope, still see nothing wrong with it :) Because even if C-Note was not some kingpin, he was still an ex-soldier, right? So I can picture him seeing moving fast and swift as a good method. Also, as a basically not evil guy PLAYING an evil guy I could easily picture him seeing all of prison as a warpath. Though maybe in the end he ended up being the fox, not the wolf :)