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26 November 2015 @ 02:11 pm
Real Lj Idol Friends and Rivals: "The Good Things In Life"  
The Good Things In Life
idol friends and rivals | week 0.5 | 290 words
The Giving Of Thanks

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"Hey, toots, what'cha doin'?"

"Hi, Grandmpa. I'm doing my Thanksgiving project. The teacher asked us to show some things we were thankful for."

"Oh, so it's like homework. At your age? Waste of good play time, you ask me. What'cha got so far?"

"I have Mommy and Mittens and you… ice cream, and rainbows, and chickens—"

"Chickens! You can't put chickens, those things are terrible. They'll kill you in your sleep."

"Farm chickens?"

"In your sleep."

"Huh. Mommy likes chickens."

"Your Ma does not like chickens. She used to run from chickens when she was a kid, like they was gonna peck her eyes out. She ever saw a chicken, she'd be across the yard faster than you could say Tetanus shot."

"My mommy? Really?"

"Yep. She knew what was what, back then… What else you gonna put on there?"

"Maybe ponies and French fries, and… ladybugs?"

"Those are all good things, Pumpkin. I like 'em."

"What would you put, Grandpa?

"Oh, you know. Pretty much like that. And the Mets. And your Grandma Junie, of course."

"But Grandma Junie's gone now. Can you do that?"

"You betcha. We had forty good years together. More would've been nice, but we were lucky to get what we had. I'll always be grateful for that."

"Did Grandma Junie like chickens?"

"Kid, nobody likes chickens, I'm telling you."

"Do you think I have enough things I'm thankful for?"

"You're only six and that's a lot of words, so I sure hope so. Hey, you wanna get ice cream?"

"Ice cream, yay!"

"Go get your coat and see if your Ma wants to come. I'll put this stuff away."

Ah, Junie, you would've loved this little girl somethin' fierce. She's a real pip.


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cindy: misc fictsuki_no_bara on November 27th, 2015 05:01 am (UTC)
this is so sweet! i love the recurring chickens. ~:>
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on November 27th, 2015 06:05 am (UTC)
Thank you! Man, chickens... they cannot be trusted.

I can't believe you found a way to emoticon a chicken at me!
Murielle: I'm Melting...murielle on November 27th, 2015 06:36 am (UTC)
Aw! I'm all teary-eyed. I love it!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on November 27th, 2015 09:05 am (UTC)
Thank you-- I'm glad you liked it!
rayasorayaso on November 27th, 2015 03:53 pm (UTC)
Such wonderful, sweet dialogue! This is a great grandfather. I love the idea of killer chickens! You always write such great dialogue. It sounds very true.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on November 27th, 2015 09:05 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Once I got that grandfather's voice in my head (the line about the chickens killing you in your sleep was what did it), this whole piece really wanted to be written.

My grandfather was a wonderful and totally different kind of guy, but this is a grandfather here anyone would love having. :)
adoptedwriter: Apple kittenadoptedwriter on November 29th, 2015 04:47 pm (UTC)
I love grandparent stories! Love this! AW
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on November 29th, 2015 08:01 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Grandparenthood is a chance to do it all over again, once your own kids have left those younger years behind. Little kids are just so awesome. :)
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on November 29th, 2015 08:01 pm (UTC)
I got a kick out of him-- I wasn't sure what I wanted to do with this prompt until I heard his voice in my head. He was irresistible!
orockthroorockthro on December 1st, 2015 12:32 am (UTC)
This is hilarious! This kid's grandpa and his vendetta against chickens is the best. XD
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 1st, 2015 12:55 am (UTC)
Thank you!

I can't help feeling that he is not wrong. Yeesh.
fodschwazzlefodschwazzle on December 1st, 2015 03:43 am (UTC)
Yup, this is good dialogue. Snappy and revealing.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 1st, 2015 07:05 am (UTC)
Thank you! The grandfather here really grabbed me, and the grandparent/grandchild relationship is one that is near and dear to my heart. :)
Jennkickthehobbit on December 1st, 2015 04:38 am (UTC)
this is cute. :3

chickens are nice, though. :'(
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 1st, 2015 07:06 am (UTC)
I know there are those who like chickens-- and chickens are even nice to them!

As the once-3-year-old sent into the dark, evil coop to steal eggs from angry, pecking chickens, though... I will never be among them. :)
Jennkickthehobbit on December 1st, 2015 07:09 am (UTC)
Fair!

My mom has chickens. I like them well enough. She's friendly to them, they're friendly to her. :)
Teo Sayseternal_ot on December 1st, 2015 01:36 pm (UTC)
Simple and Sweet... <3...loved the hidden emotions/messages you passed on..Great dialogues! Enjoyed reading this..:)
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 1st, 2015 06:05 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm especially glad you noticed the parts that were implied in the background. :)
Raised by Wolvessinnamongirl on December 2nd, 2015 12:30 am (UTC)
That's very sweet, and seriously, screw chickens. Hate them. They deserve to be eaten with a delicious stuffing and mashed potatoes.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 2nd, 2015 12:37 am (UTC)
Haha! That is pretty much how I feel about them. I know they're practically pets to some people, but apart from that, they are not to be trusted. Also, they peck. Sneakily. :O
Raised by Wolvessinnamongirl on December 2nd, 2015 04:10 am (UTC)
No, they're just food on feet. Years ago my mom found a half-frozen chicken under our back porch and insisted on nursing it back to health and letting it roam free. Named it Chicken-Boo after the chicken in Animaniacs. It wasn't even all that bad a chicken, but it definitely cemented my hatred of them. Somehow. So long ago I don't remember how, but since Chicken-Boo, I can't stand them.
alycewilsonalycewilson on December 9th, 2015 05:42 pm (UTC)
I'm thankful for reading a sweet piece like this. the memories of those you love never leave you, it's true.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on December 9th, 2015 05:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you-- I'm glad this is giving you a warm, fuzzy feeling.

And how sweet of you to be doing back-reading, especially with all that's been going on in you life.
alycewilson: KFP 2015alycewilson on December 9th, 2015 07:20 pm (UTC)
I am actually finding that reading these pieces is a pleasany distraction. It helps when my mind won't stop spinning.