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17 October 2015 @ 06:31 pm
Two Haiku: "Cleaning" and "Sea World"  
Two haiku
For writerverse



Cleaning
Foreign contamin—
there. And there. Streaks, germs, grime—who?
Walle. Nemesis!


Sea World
Waves whisper wetly
above stillness. Dark kingdoms
rule the depths below.

 
 
 
riverotter1951: north American river otterriverotter1951 on October 18th, 2015 01:59 pm (UTC)
Beautiful. I'm glad that you decided to write haiku. Try tanka next - 5,7,5,7,7.
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphorshalfshellvenus on October 18th, 2015 09:34 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I thought about tanka, but when I looked up the form, it seemed to warrant something with deeper themes/etc. than I was prepared to write here. Though that second one... I did consider it.

Come to think of it, haiku should probably be more serene than that first one, but I just couldn't resist. :D
Don't call me "Dubby"!: Birthday Cakethe_dark_snack on October 19th, 2015 10:04 am (UTC)
Happy Birthday!
The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Birthdayhalfshellvenus on October 20th, 2015 05:11 am (UTC)
Thank you very much!