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04 March 2007 @ 12:42 am
This is not the haiku you're looking for...  
I gacked this from deirdre_c, and this could not be less like me. What it is is John Winchester. It's made up from part of a recent drabble I wrote on him. The phrase "puny-ass" is so fitting for John's POV, and SO very wrong for mine.


OK, no table. The code isn't working. Here's what I got, though:

can i help you he
says but inside he thinks your
puny ass problems



Take Eleven was....

i am here his
body shook inside the door
with his shirt off and


which ends a sentence with "and". Dude, your haiku-program sux!

Seriously, you'd think my journal was entirely full of random. These are entry snippets, and they're more sentence-fragment than haiku.

Haiku is an art! Software scrambling not so much in this case, though I cannot resist taking a quiz from a site called "angrygoats.net". :0

I've always understood haiku to follow the formula of "17 syllables over three lines divided into 5-7-5", so here's a real one I wrote years ago:
Funeral witness
leaves the muted rose behind.
Petals scatter grief
.

Prison Break fandom written just now:
Inside iron and gray
souls die slowly. Leave before
spirits, bodies fail
.

Supernatural fandom:
Destiny finds you
despite killing it, running,
forcing promises.


Can't say that they're any good, but they are definitely more focused. :)
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The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors: Samhalfshellvenus on March 4th, 2007 09:28 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much!

It's Sam, of course. And poor Dean, having that promise forced on him that no-one could keep. *wibbles*